Thank you for the comments! You and the others have very good points about the dialogue being a little confusing so I've gone back and edited it to show 'quotes' around the italicized portions, I still want that distinction from the regular speech but I don't want to confuse people so thank you for pointing that out!

I do have a tendency for cumbersome, ridiculously long sentences. Sometimes I catch them and sometimes I don't so thank you for pointing out one I hadn't! :-D

I'm glad the dialogue is believable, I was a little worried about walking the line between regular adults and stuck in a secret government facility adults and somehow meshing that into belivable, realistic conversation. I am trying to bring more mannerisms and personality quirks into the story and in scenes where they're actually in person it's easier. While they're communicatio=ng just in thoughts I can't really show physical tics or anything like that but I'm trying to flesh that out in other scenes.

Thank you very much for the concrit, I love reading feedback with specific suggestions.