You picked out things that I didn't notice which is why I think it's good to get someone else to look at it as well as yourself going through it numerous amount of times!
But yes everything you've said makes complete sense to me, and I completely agree.
I just didn't see it before you'd said some of it.
I will go and edit it with these in mind. I may well post it again if I have time when I've edited it and you could see whether it's any better.
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You picked out things that I didn't notice which is why I think it's good to get someone else to look at it as well as yourself going through it numerous amount of times!
But yes everything you've said makes complete sense to me, and I completely agree.
I just didn't see it before you'd said some of it.
I will go and edit it with these in mind. I may well post it again if I have time when I've edited it and you could see whether it's any better.
Thanks again
Lucy