http://neensz.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] neensz.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] writers_loft 2010-02-02 04:33 pm (UTC)

Thank you very much for your fresh eyes! I took your advice to heart and edited ruthlessly.

I really couldn't seem to get across what I meant with the door on the wrong side of my bedroom closet bit, regardless of how I worded it (I was imagining a closet that has the two sliding doors, with one side that is never opened for fear of being buried in precariously piled crap), so I just made it the hall closet instead.

And you're totally right, I had way too much fun with the blog entry. Only a small part of it is relevant at all to that part of the story. I can always save the excised parts and use them somewhere else, if needed :)

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