ext_134076 ([identity profile] mystical-chickn.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] writers_loft 2008-08-29 12:16 am (UTC)

I just had an idea. What if I changed the beginning so that Emyll stays hidden, Vru leaves for some reason (I'll think of something), and then Emyll comes out of her hiding place and (after a semi-brief dialogue) kills Gaira? It would make more sense, I think. I'll have to go through and delete all references to the spell that Emyll no longer has to cast on Vru.

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