A new member looking for feedback

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So I am a new member not only to this community/ group but also to LJ and am in the process of starting a new path in my life, hoping to head down a road filled with books. I have a story that I started writing several months ago but lost inspiration as the holidays arrived. I am hoping that I could get some feedback as to whether I should continue writing. If I do decided to finish this story I believe I should go back and add more details and lengthen the chapters. Anywho, any honest opinions, critique, etc. would be greatly appreciated (and please don't worry about hurting my feelings, I would like real honest critique).

Title: Tamlyn Marie's Grace
By: Myself, Angie Stroud (easternsunset)
Fantasy Fiction
Maybe Teen (for some mild violence)

 

Chapter 1 - A Visitor
Tamlyn Marie rose well before the sun that misty morning. She dawned her fanciest dress, still all tattered and worn. The dingy skirts billowed out around her as she ran her fingers through her dark tangle of curls. market day was her favorite day of the week, because it was the only day she was allowed to leave her constant chores inside and see the sunshine and breathe the slightly fresher air of town.
Tamlyn tip toed through the empty halls of the mansion careful not to wake the other servants or the masters of the house. She quickly gathered her basket of goods to trade for the sweet delicacies the masters desired, and wrapped her tattered shawl around her shoulders. Tamlyn slipped silently out the kitchen door into the grey of early morning. As she began the her long walk Tamlyn began to hum and by the time she reached the end of the driveway and the gates of the mansion she had begun to sing softly. Her sweet, angelic voice drifted ahead of her on the still quiet streets.
The walk passed quickly as Tamlyn sang her way into the town square. The rising sun was quickly burning off the heavy mist, revealing the shop keepers opening up and the cart owners setting up their goods. As Tamlyn made her way through the fast filling streets her cheery song brought smiles to familiar faces. Hands waved happily to her and voices rang out "Good Week, Tamlyn!"
Through out the morning into mid day she bartered and traded for the fancies that the masters requested. Sweet candies, bitter ale, and fine laces safely made their way into Tamlyn's basket. By early afternoon all her stops had been made and Tamlyn still had time to enjoy the bustling sights and sounds of the market place.
Tamlyn Marie made her way across the market square and settled in her favorite place for a meager meal of bread and cheese. She sat on the bench between the theater stairs and the towering library observing the organized chaos of the day. As she finished eating, Tamlyn tucked her cloth napkin back into her basket when a commotion broke out on the theater stairs.
A large crowd was gathering and climbing the stairs to the doorway. Her interest peaked, Tamlyn made her way to the back of the crowd to see what the ruckus was all about. As she neared the group she recognized a dear friend, Franklin. Frank was a grey and aging man who wondered the streets peddling goods from his small cart. She waved and called out to her old friend. He smiled and quickly made his way to her with his painted donkey and cart in tow. When he neared her she could see his smile dancing in his pale blue eyes as he said "My Dear, you are looking lovely today".
"You are always too kind, Frank" Tamlyn replied. "What is happening here?" she asked looking at the crowd making their way up the theater stairs.
"Oh goodness child, haven't you heard? Those stuffy folks need to give you some time to get out and hear the latest news!" he remarked "The great Umperio is in town!" Frank cried with such a grand gesture he startled his poor old donkey awake.
Looking a little confused Tamlyn asked "Who exactly is the Great Umperio? And what exactly makes him or her so great?"
Frank laughed lightly and explained "The Great Umperio is the master of many talents. SHE sings and dances, she also performs skits and plays multiple musical instruments. She even teaches animals amazing tricks to perform on stage with her." He looked up at the crowd eagerly and continued his explaination "She is meeting with individuals personally today. In every town she visits she holds and exclusive event for only 12 people. Only those people personally invited may attend tonight's event." Frank finished excitedly.
"So all these people are hoping to get a chance to meet with her and get invited?" Tamlyn questioned still somewhat perplexed, and was about to tell Franklin good luck in his meeting with the Great Umperio and be on her way when a small door at the bottom of the theater stairs opened right next to Tamlyn and Frank. Out walked a man dressed in a fine black suit who appeared to be a butler, followed by 2 guards. The man surveyed the crowd on the stairs as he called out in a loud commanding voice "The Great Umperio will now entertain a visit with a single lady."
He continued scanning the crowd as the elegantly dressed ladies began surging forward. The Butler held up his hand and looked directly at Tamlyn Marie and stated loudly "And you M'Lady are the one."
Tamlyn's emerald green eyes widened as she glanced around her and then back to the butler. "Me?" she asked quietly in shock.
"Yes you," the Butler responded "but you must hurry The Great Umperio hasn't much time." With that he held out his hand and beckoned her to follow.
Tamlyn looked back at Franklin who was smiling with so much joy his face looked as though it would split in two. Frank reached grey and wrinkled hand, giving hers a squeeze and whispered "Go! and good luck!"
She smiled down at the old man and whispered back "I will be back soon and I will tell you all the details." With that she brushed her curls back over her shoulder and followed the Butler into the dark doorway. The two guards followed behind her quickly shutting the door against the crowd surging forward hoping to meet the Great Umperio.

Chapter 2 - The Great Umperio
As the door clanged shut behind her, Tamlyn was thrown into darkness. She clutched her basket before her as she waited for her eyes to adjust. By the time she could finally see in the dim light, the dark form of the Butler was already well down the hall. Tamlyn walked as quickly as she could down the unfamiliar tunnel like hallway. By the time she caught up to the briskly walking Butler he was rounding a corner in the hall and opening a heavy door.
Tamlyn followed him in silence through the door into a large room. The room was brightly lit with sunlight passing through brilliantly colored stain glass windows on all sides of the room. Tamlyn gazed around her in awe. She had only seen the theater buiding from the outside. The inside was even more beautiful with the intricate carvings on the ceiling and the polished marble floor. Tamlyn was interupted in her gazing by the Butler stopping abruptly in front of a set of great double doors.
The Butler turned to her "I will go alert the Great Umperio you are here, but I require your name to introduce you. " his voice echoing through the large empty room.
"My Name," Tamlyn stammered quietly "My Name is Tamlyn Marie." She finally managed to say.
"Very well Tamlyn Marie. Please place your belongings" he pointed to her basket "on the table next to the guard and wait here for my return."
Tamlyn only managed a nod before the Butler turned around and disappeared through one of the great wooden doors. She stared at the door for a moment before turning to find the table he had directed her to. She sucked in her breath as she saw a guard standing not far from her that she hadn't notices only moments before. After recovering she quietly stepped over and carefully placed her basket on the tiny table beside the guard who did not even seem to blink at her movement.
With a nervous sigh Tamlyn stepped back before the doorway as the Butler had instructed. Tamlyn did her best to brush years filth from her dress and anxiously smoothed her skirt. She began quietly humming a song nervously as she tucked a few stray curls behind her ear. She continued humming softly as she glanced around the room she waited in. The windows were colorful depictions of famous scenes of plays and stories. One of Rapunzel in a tower with her long hair dropped to her rescuer, another of Hamlet holding the skull of Ophelia, and yet another of Sampson standing chained to pillars as his hair was being cut.
Tamlyn was startled from her study of the animals and cherubs carved into the ceiling by the loud slam of the door behind her. She stopped humming as she quickly turned back around to see the Butler once again standing stiffly before her.
The Butler cleared his throat and spoke as if he were before a high court. "The Great Lady Umperio will see you now Tamlyn Marie. But first I must inform you of some guidelines for your visit." He looked at her sternly.
Tamlyn's brilliant green eyes opened wide as she nodded to let him know she was listening.
"You must not touch the Great Umperio unless she offers first. Next you must not leave your side of the table unless invited to do so. Take nothing, touch nothing, and eat nothing that has not been offered to you. And finally if the Great Umperio dismisses you, you are to leave through these same doors immediately. Do you understand Tamlyn Marie?" He asked glaring down at her.
Tamlyn nodded firmly too afraid to speak. She wrung her hands before her to hide the shaking from fear.
"Okay, then please follow me Madam" he said turning back to the large wooden doors. Signalling to the guard with a tip of his head the doors were opened wide. The Butler stepped briskly into the next brightly lit room.
Tamlyn followed closely behind, afraid to make any mistakes. The Butler stepped aside to reveal a long narrow table covered in colorful fruits and sweets. Before Tamlyn could observe more the Butler bowed low "Madam Great Umperio, I present to you the Lady Tamlyn Marie."
Unsure of what to do, Tamlyn curtsied low before rising to glimpse this Great Umperio. As she lifted her head she was shocked to see seated across the table a short thin elderly woman. Her hair was grey and wispy and her face covered with wrinkles but her eyes sparkled with life and energy.
"Please be seated Lady Tamlyn" the woman's voice rang out in the small room as a tiny hand pointed to the chair across the table. The Butler stepped forward drawing the chair out and indicating that Tamlyn should sit.
Tamlyn quickly stepped forward and as she sat she quietly replied "Thank you Madam Umperio". The Butler slid her seat beneath her and bowed to the Great Umperio again before with drawing from the room leaving Tamlyn alone with the Lady Umperio.

Chapter 3 - A Special Request
Tamlyn gazed down at her hands folded in her lap shyly. It wasn't long before the elderly lady across from her broke the silence "So Lady Tamlyn what would you like to know? Have you enjoyed the shows?" The Great Umperio asked.
"I am sorry Madam Umperio, but I am not sure what to ask and honestly I have not seen the show" Tamlyn responded softly.
The Great Umperio's grey eyes widened "You haven't seen the show? Then why were you waiting to meet me? To request tickets no doubt" her eyes darkened and narrowed as she glared across the table at Tamlyn.
"No M'am I wasn't going to as for tickets" Tamlyn quickly stated "In fact Great Umperio I didn't even know who you were until my friend Franklin explained just moments before your butler came out and asked me in" she blurted out nervously and quickly added "I am sorry Madam".
Tamlyn was startled as the lady facing her burst out in laughter. "How is it that a young lady such as yourself does not know the Great Umperio?" She asked choking back her laughter.
"I . . " Tamlyn stammered "I am but a servant girl for the Masters Ricardles" she lowered her head ashamed.
"Ah, I see" the Great Umperio said her voice softening "Please Lady Tamlyn have some these delicious fruits."
Tamlyn looked back up in shock, she had been expecting a curt dismissal. "Thank you" Tamlyn responded quietly and reached out placing a small bunch of grapes on her plate. She popped one in her mouth savoring the sweet juices.
The Great Umperio once again broke the silence, "So Geoffrey tells me" she nodded toward the door that the Butler had disappeared behind. "That you were humming while waiting and appear to have some musical talent." She stated her grey eyes studying Tamlyn.
"Oh, yes M'am, I mean no" Tamlyn fumbled "I mean yes I was humming, I do that often when I am nervous, but as far as talen I am unsure." She finished biting her lower lip, her cheeks burned with blush.
After a long silence a soft voice called "Tamlyn". The Great Umperio called again "Lady Tamlyn, look at me."
Tamlyn slowly raised her head, her eyes glistening with unshed tears. "Yes Madam Great Umperio?" she whispered once again afraid she was about to be dismissed.
"Please Tamlyn call me Gwenyth" The older woman said smiling softly. "and if Geoffrey mentions talent then you do have it. You must always believe in yourself, with that you can do anything." A sharp rapping came from the door interupting her. "Now I must attend to the others who have been waiting to meet me."
Tamlyn nodded and rose from her seat "Many thanks Madam Great Umperio, I mean Lady Gwenyth." She curtsied and quickly turned to exit through the big double doors, but before she could open one fo the doors Gwenyth called to her.
"Tamlyn, my dear. Come over and give this aging lady a hug." Tamlyn turned back to find the Great Umperio standing with her arms outstretched. Tamlyn quickly walked around the extravantly set table and into the waiting arms. She tentatively hugged the shorter frail woman still somewhat confused. As she broke her hug Gwenyth Umperio slipped a small parcel inot Tamlyn's skirt pocket.
The Great Umperio whispered "Open this only when you are alone, tell no one of it but be sure to open it before dinner tonight." Stepping back she smiled at Tamlyn and said in a mock stern voice "No go quickly before we both get in trouble with Geoffrey."
Tamlyn whispered "Thank you" before turning and walking briskly to the door. She wrenched the heavy wooden door open and caught a glimpse of the Great Umperio waving to her before rushing from the room. The large double door clanged shut behind her, echoing through the large empty room.
Tamlyn hurried over to the small table gathering up her basket. The guard mearly motioned towards the door to the long dark hallway that had led her here. Tamlyn thanked the guard though he made no acknowledgement that he had heard her and nearly jogged across the lovely marble floor to the tunnel like hall.
Pushing the door open Tamlyn peered into the darkness and slipped into the hallway. The door slid shut behind her silently, once again thrusting her into darkness. She picked her way down the hall with one hand on the wall to guide her way. As she stumbled blindly down the hall her hand hit something solid infront of her. Tamlyn slid her hand along the smooth surface until she found the handle.
Pushing the door open, Tamlyn stepped out into the bustling market place. She squinted against the bright sunlight. She heard voices calling out around her "Is it her?", "Can we go in?" Then a closer voice called out disappointedly "It is only a serving girl."
Tamlyn held a hand up to sheild her eyes and was startled to find the sun already traveling down in the sky. Oh she must hurry and get back to the mansion, she was going to be in so much trouble.

Chapter 4 - The Parcel

Tamlyn hurried through the crowded streets, rushing past shop owners closing their doors for the day. Even though she went as quickly as she could, the sky was already on fire with theseting sun by the time she reached the iron gates of the mansion.
As Tamlyn began the long walk up the driveway she clutched her basket full of goods in front of her. Looking up at the house she could already see that Argu, the head servant, standing out next to the kitchen door glaring down at Tamlyn. She kept her head down as she quickened her pace to the door. Tamlyn did her best to sweep past the large angry Argu but was buffeted across her ear as she tried to pass.
Argu lifted Tamlyn roughly by the arm after sending her sprawling across the ground. She drug Tamlyn through the doorway tossing her easily across the kitchen. "Well you certainly took you time dawdling" Argu roared, her face nearly as red as the embers burning in the oven.
"I . . I am sorry Madam Argu" Tamlyn stammered out quietly. "Some of the stops took longer than I expected" which wasn't entirely a lie, as she had most certainly not expected her final stop. Tamlyn cowered trying to make herself as small as possible, her head was already beginning to ache from Argu's cuff.
"Well princess" Argu spat mockingly "you have made Ashlynne cover your duties for the day, so you will cover hers this evening and you will recieve no dinner tonight." Agru stomped past the frightened Tamlyn to the door "And you are relieved of market duty from this day forward" She fummed and stormed out the door that slammed shut sharply behind her.
Tamlyn did not move for several minutes until she was certian Argu would not return for further discipline for her tardiness. Tamlyn rose slowly, her head throbbing painfully. She braced herself against the wall as she leaned to gather her basket.
Tamlyn began scampering around as quickly as she could manage, carefully avoiding Argu, placing the market goods where they needed to go. She laid the shiny silks and fancy lace out in the Mistress' parlor, smoothing the wrinkles out carefully. Then, the Master's cigars went in the humidor in the study; the sweet candies went in the crystal dish in the sitting room; and so on and so forth. She then began the long list of Ashlynne's chores. First feed the chickens and gather eggs for the morning meal, then on to turning down the Master's beds and polish the brass banister and fixtures, and on to sweeping the front porch. The list seemed to go on and on.
Before she even realized it the evening dinner was being served. With the chime of the dinner bells Tamlyn suddenly remembered the parcel the Great Umperio had given her. She quickly reached into her pocket and was relieved to feel the smooth parchment wrapped package. Thoughts raced through her mind as she tried to figure out the best way to open it with no one to discover her. A thought struck Tamlyn, Agru would be busy serving the Masters their dinner and one of Ashlynne's evening chorse was to gather produce form the cellar for breakfast.
Tamlyn hurried to finish cleaning the glass windows in the front sitting room. Once she finished she returned the rag and bucket to the small closet of cleaning supplies and quietly made her way to the cellar. She managed to slip down into the cool earthy room without anyone noticing. Tamlyn lit a tiny candle she had managed to hide away in her apron and reached into her pocket drawing out the parcel.
Sinking to an over turned barrel Tamlyn turned the parcel over and over in her hands, admiring the shiny parchment paper it was wrapped in and the soft silky pink thread it had been tied with. She gently tugged the loose end of the string, letting it fall freely to her lap. Tamlyn carefully bent back the crisp paper and revealed a cloth paper envelope dyed a deep purple and sealed with golden wax. She raised it up squinting to see the seal stamped into the wax, the design was and intricate pattern of roses in a U shape around a unicorn rearing into a star flecked sky. It was so beautiful Tamlyn hated to break it, but she did regrettfully.
Tamlyn drew a single sheet of the same purple dyed cloth paper out of the envelope. Careful not to rip the delicate paper she unfolded the page. All across the page, silver ink scrolled the most beautiful writing. She drew the candle close to read the intricate print.
"The Great Umperio requests the honor of your presense at a private event tonight. Arrive at the theater promptly at night bells with this invite in hand. Formal Attire."
Tamlyn read it again to be certain she had read it correctly and again to be double sure. She even duge her finger nail into her arm to see if she was dreaming, but with the pain it drew it was most definately real. In some what of a daze Tamlyn carefully returned the parcel back to the way she had received it and stowed it away back in her dress pocket.

Chapter 5 - Into Trouble

Tamlyn rose off the overturned barrel and started pacing the cellar. She chewed on her lower lip as thoughts ran thru her mind. Evening bells were in two hours, there was no way she could finish Ashlynne's chores before then and there was the issue of formal attire; she was already in her best dress but that was no where near formal attire. She came to an abrupt halt as an idea hit her. If she hurried back to town maybe she could return the invite to the Great Uperio and she could then give it to someone who could use it, but Tamlyn would have to get out of the house first. That would prove difficult with Argu already on the rampage. However one of Ashlynne's chores for the evening was to bed the horses for the night and to milk the cow, though that particular chore was generally saved for later in the evening Tamlyn though she could use that as an excuse to go outside.
Her resolve set she gathered the potatoes, onions, apples and tomatos for the morning meal and headed back up into the kitchen. Upon reaching the kitchen she placed the produce in a large bowl on the counter for Cook. Tamlyn turned to slip quietly out the door and ran abruptly into Argu. Argu stood over her, hands on her hips, glaring down at her. "What do you think you are doing?" Argu growled at her. For a moment fear passed across Tamlyn's emerald eyes "You missed the third floor banister" Argu warned over her "I will not stand for your lazy work, or you will be taking on all the servants chores! Now up stairs immediately! I want to see my reflection in that banister!" she demanded her voice raising with each word.
Tamlyn did not wait for Argu to raise her fist again. She scampered as quickly as possible upstairs and grabbed her rag and polish. She began frantically polishing the banister, all the while all she could think is I must get to the Great Umperio.
She polished the banister in record time and didn't wait for Argu's approval before dashing down the stairs. She rushed through the kitchen, nearly knocking Cook over in her hurry to grab the milk bucket. Tamlyn barely hesitated before flinging the kitchen door open and dashing out into the night.
Tamlyn ran under the cover of darkness to the shelter of the stone wall and the hedges that ran along it. She stashed the milk bucket in a clump of bushes where she could easily find it when she returned. Tamlyn glanced back at the barn hating to leave the animals with no dinner, but she would be back before long and hopefully it would be before the old cow began lowing for her food.
With a final glance back at the barn and another towards the kitchen, Tamlyn began slinking through the shadows of the stone wall. It seemed to take hours to make her way to the gates, as she froze at any movements in or out of the manison, terrified that Argu would realize that she had disappeared. With a sigh of relief she finally made it to the gate and with a final glance around her, she made a mad dash through the open gate and down the street on the other side.
When she was well away from the mansion and thought it was safe she paused to catch her breath. Tamlyn reaced into her pocket to reassure herself that the parcel from the Great Umperio was safe. She must hurry it was nearly evening bells now! Tamlyn slipped her well worn shoes off to run faster and once again took off down the street.
Tamlyn broke into the empty market square her lungs burning with the effort. The lanterns were already burning in the square meaning it was less than half a bell to the sounding of evening bells. Tamlyn jogged over to the theater stairs her mass of curls falling freely around her face. She went immediately to the door at the bottom of the stairs through which she had entered previously. Before she could get the door open two large hands clamped down tightly on her shoulders so hard she felt as though her bones would snap. Tamlyn tried to twist around to see who her capture was but two more hands clamped around her arms and began dragging her carelessly up the stairs.
Tamlyn was practically carried through the doors of the theater and through the grand entryway and down a long hall to one side. She was drug through yet another door way and across a smaller room where she was thrown painfully at tht bottom of another stair case. Tamlyn twisted to look up and managed to squeak out "Please sir, I must speak with Lady Gwenyth, I mean the Great Umperio"
A voice rumbled over her "You will be doing no such thing you little rat." The back side of his hand smarted across her cheek driving home his point. Tamlyn did her best to bite back the tears that were welling up in her eyes.

Chapter 6 - Grace Arrives

With the sound of shoes on the polished marble floor and the rustle of linen, Tamlyn came to the realization that they were not the only ones in the room. "Attention" a loud commanding voice echoed from behind her and immediately the hands holding her prisoner dropped away. She heard foot falls come up behind her and with each click of a heel that drew closer she flinched. Then the voice boomed again "What is the meaning of this?"
The voice beside her that had spoken earlier answered crisply "We found this weasle trying to break in through one of the side doors."
Before the man could continue his explaination a door at the top of the stairs was flung open. With a rustle of skirts another entered the room. Tamlyn risked a look up the stairs through her dark brown curls and was somewhat relieved to see the Great Umperio. The older woman's voice rang out "What is this ruckus about, disturbing me in my preparation for this evening's event?" she asked.
Before the man beside her could again begin his harsh description of the events, Tamlyn reached into her pocket and drew out the small parcel, placing it on the steps before her. "Great Umperio" Tamly began, her voice shaking "Madam Gwenyth, I came to return your invite as I dont believe it was meant for me and that I will be unable to attend. I brought it to you in hopes that you would be able to give it to someon who could." She finished dropping her head and chewing her lip.
Tamlyn caught movement out of the corner of her eye through the mass of curls. She instinctively flinched, expecting another blow for speaking without being asked. Instead a gentle hand touched her shoulder, and a deep voice rumbled quietly "M'Lady, are you okay? Can you rise?"
Tamlyn turned her head slightly looking from behind the safety of her hair and saw a handsome young man's face, his slate blue eyes filled with worry. She only nodded in response and began standing. She stumbled as pain shot through her right knee, but those kind hands were once again on her arm supporting her. Tamlyn mumbled a quiet thank you.
She raised her head to look up at the Great Umperio, her hair falling back from her face. The older woman gasped at seeing the already forming welts and bruises across Tamlyn's face. She rushed down the stairs "Lady Tamlyn! You are bleeding and hurt, please sit so we can tend to you." Gwenyth shot an icy glare at the two guards that still flanked Tamlyn and took the younger woman's arm leading her to a near by chair. With a wave of her hand the Great Umperio dismissed everyone who had gathered in the room.
A young girl approached with a bowl and a cloth. Tamlyn began to protest but was brought up short hissing in pain as Gwenyth put the damp cloth to her face. Once the pain had somewhat subsided she began again. "Madam Umperio" Tamlyn pleaded "I really must return, Argu and the Masters will be most upset if they find I have left. I do thank you for the kind invitation. . "
Tamlyn was stopped as the Great Umperio held up her hand. "Nonesense, you are already here, you might as well stay."
Tamlyn once again began protesting but was interupted by yelling echoing from the hallway. She was only able to make out a few words of the deep voice but someone was obviously upset.
The Great Umperio's voice rang out again, drawing Tamlyn's attention back to her "Besides I can't let you leave like this, you are injured and in no condition to be walking around or returning to work." Gwenyth concluded firmly. Tamlyn only sighed, giving up; she could stay until the Great Umperio was distracted by her performance and then slip out quietly, hopefully it wouldn't be too much longer.
The door to the hall flung open and a tall man strode in. He moved across the room with purpose towards Tamlyn and the Great Umperio. He was obviously a man of power, he was dressed in a formal uniform, signifying him as a high ranking soldier at least. His broad shoulders set squarely and his muscles revealing that he spent many hours in training. As he neared Tamlyn recognized him as the man that had assisted her earlier. He bowed to Gwenyth "The guards have been dealt with Madam Umperio" he rumbled with a voice so deep you could feel it in your chest. He then turned to Tamlyn "I deeply apologize for any pain you suffered from their mistreatment, and I assure you they will be disciplined accordingly."
The Great Umperio smiled "Thank you for your assistance Sir Lewen" She then turned to Tamlyn "Lady Tamlyn Marie I would like to present to you your escort for this evening's events, Sir Derek Lewen."
Tamlyn opened her mouth to speak but was again interupted, this time by the chiming of the evening bells. Gwenyth rose "Oh dear, it is time already. We must be seeing to your attire quickly Tamlyn. Come come" she beckoned. The young serving girl assisting her up and leading her from the room behind the Great Umperio.
 

I really hope I did this cut thing right.


Thanks so much for any help :D

~Ang