writers_loft | What Do You Think...? (Reply)

...And any ideas for improvement?
I came up with this ages ago, tried to write it and got shot down. However, i have been dying to write about them :/

Anna joined the House of Gaia after being turned by Henri and being rescued by Gemma, Milo and Julian. Anna is told by Henri (He thinks she is going to die) about his plan and repeats most of it to Julian because Emelin is involved. Julian sends Milo and Gemma ahead to Nottingham while he and Anna go after Emelin. Henri, desperate to have more power is completely ready to try and kill Julian and to kill Anna. Henri is planning to go back in time and kill Julian and Emelin at their most vulnerable, without each other.

(Julian fell in love with Emelin and planned to propose to her in 1849, but he didn’t realise she was leaving. Instead, he slipped her the ring, hoping she would find it in her bag and come back, but she didn’t. She couldn’t find any routes back. When she finally did, 30 years later, Julian had left, believing she didn’t love him back. For 120 years, Emelin stayed in the UK, in case he came back.) Even I'm not sure if i like this bit.

Henri, wanting to kill Emelin because she left him and because of a personal dispute with Julian, Henri arrives at a party in Nottingham. Julian distracts Henri and Henri switches powers at the last minute, sending them back in time. In that era, Henri sends his daughter, his best assassin after them. Another time traveller helps the couple, jumping them through time so they can get away, until she is killed by the assassin and Julian kills the assassin. Henri then comes after them personally. He has a gun and ends up holding it to Emelin’s head.

Any questions just ask, please don't flame for me not having explained it fully. (something i have had several times before)