writers_loft | I changed my Prologue (Reply)

I've taken everyone's adivce into consideration. The problem is I want some things to unfold during to story so you feel like you are part of the story. And I've probably written like what? 10, 11 chapters already, but I still don't know what to do for a prologue. Now some of you said I shouldn't have one... I thought about that, I felt like I needed one, just for some reason. But my point is I had a brainstorm last night and I wanted to see what you guys thought of my new prologue. When I pictured it though I kind of pictured it in movie form but I think it still works when on paper... anyhoo tell me what you think of my new and (hopefully) improved prologue.

Status report:
Name: Classified a.k.a. Agent 99 a.k.a. Mae Waterfall
Eye Color: Sapphire Blue
Current Eye Color: Violet
Hair: Back long, thick, and wavy in between milk chocolate and dark chocolate colored hair
Current Hair: Long, strait, chocolate brown
Body Figure: Slender, and rounded
Height: 5” 4’
Other Appearances: Soft, heart shaped face, almond shaped eyes, pointed nose and thin lips
Personality: Kind, funny, always smiling, tough, independent, a leader
Special Abilities: Photographic Memory, sixth sense a.k.a. E.S.P
Agency: Rose Thorn
Age: 16 a.k.a. 18
Location: Evergreen, Colorado
Address: Classified

Status Report:
Name: Eric Jay Knight
Eye color: Emerald Green
Hair: Black, short, kind of cropped, but wavy
Body Figure: Gangly, medium built
Height: 6” 5’
Other Appearances: Oval shaped face, rounded eyes, strait nose, and full lips
Personality: Fierce, loving, a leader stands up for what’s right, serious in his work
Vampire Power: Learns (the other vampires fighting technique) and uses it against them, and can heal (but it’s a slow process; the pain always gets worse before it gets better, and the person always falls asleep afterward. *Can be improved*)
Agency: Night Watchers (lower class)
Current Age: 18
Real Age: Unknown
Location: Wilsonville, Oregon
Address: Classified

It's a little sketchy 'cause I just thought of it last night, but I was thinking, I could update you guys like this througout the story.

I'd really like some constructive critisism, if you will... again. I'd appreciate it.

Thanks again!