Well, it was good. But you could add maybe more of what Rosa if feeling [becuase it's first person right?]. And usually in a first person you get to know the protagonist personally, you get to see what they think, what they feel, etc. etc. Things like that.
For now, that's all I got. Other than that I thought it was good! ^.^ Are you planning to write more, meaning novel... story [about 300 pages or less] or just a short story. You got me reeled in! ^.^
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Date: 2009-12-10 04:46 am (UTC)For now, that's all I got. Other than that I thought it was good! ^.^ Are you planning to write more, meaning novel... story [about 300 pages or less] or just a short story. You got me reeled in! ^.^
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