This is a very good start to the story. You've got me I'm interested. Already, I like that the knight is a woman. There doesn’t seem to be enough of that in fantasy stories, and she definitely seems to hold her own. That her name is so much more different than the other characters--Rune, Kurt, Owen--makes me wonder about her origins too. The introduction of Rune and his abilities also makes me assume that he's going to be very vital to the story.
The writing itself is really good; the actions, the descriptions and the dialogue. Your description of the settings seems really natural and paints a really clear picture of the settings. My only suggestion would be to add little distinctive markers for the boys, as they right now seem like a sort of clumped together entity when everyone else gets so much description by contrast.
Overall, I really like this--you're a great writer. :)
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Date: 2008-04-15 02:16 am (UTC)The writing itself is really good; the actions, the descriptions and the dialogue. Your description of the settings seems really natural and paints a really clear picture of the settings. My only suggestion would be to add little distinctive markers for the boys, as they right now seem like a sort of clumped together entity when everyone else gets so much description by contrast.
Overall, I really like this--you're a great writer. :)