Chapter One Complete

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I'm new on here. I just found this site the other day and I am pretty excited about it so far. I recently posted a chapter of my comedical essay novel. I've finished four chapters but I'm doing edits on the other 3 as we speak. Anyway, I hope you guys can take a look at it and tell me what you think. The title of the chapter is "Speargate." I will post the story below.

( Speargate )