First post on this community - Liquid Morphine

[tygermine.livejournal.com]

Hi, This is the first story I'm posting on this community. Con-crit is most appreciated.
I have a few more stories up my sleeve but wanted feedback on this one first.

Thanks!

 WARNING: Alcohol/Drug abuse, Language
I don't have a name for my leading lady. Any suggestions?
Enjoy!

Liquid Morphine

 

( Liquid Morphine )

A Question of Motivation

[aeriedraconia.livejournal.com]

I saw this question over on Absolute Write and thought it was a good one.

How do you motivate yourself to write when you don't really feel like writing?

The Mind's Gift - Short Story II

[marinegagnonsf.livejournal.com]

This is my second short story for "Bustin' June." I used said inspiration site for the idea, but didn't really use it in the end. It gave me my plot, sure, and a few ideas. But woah, what my brain came up with. I love it, and I hope you love it too! 2300 words.

( The Mind's Gift )

editing help requested

[orchard-mnt.livejournal.com]

I'm stuck. 

This third part of the sixth chapter introduces another secondary character. I'm trying to describe a dinner dress she's helping my primary female lead change into. It's a made over child's dress.  I'm trying to compliment this thing and tell how it's different from and better than my character's other clothes, because it feels more comfortable on her newly pregnant body.  I've missed the mark somehow. I've highlighted this awful paragraph in red.

I think the rest of the 945 words flow well. What do you think?