my first short story.

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Greetings, I'm new to this community and livejournal as well.  I recently wrote a short story for my Beginning Fiction Writing Workshop class... and my opinion is that the only way to get better as a writer is to get feedback from others, so any feedback about the story would be appreciated. Thank you! 

My earliest memory is of a neon green dollar sign.  I was four, walking along the street for some reason or another flanked by my parents, each of them holding one of my hands.  I happened to look up and see this dollar sign in a window, radiating a color that is plentiful in convoluted glass tubes all across this city but can be found nowhere in nature.  

( Sin City )