My story - Auryn, the golden land (part 1)

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Hi!
This is my first post here and I would like to get some feedback on my story called "Auryn - The golden land". This is my first original story kind of. This story was originally written in Swedish, but I have translated it to English for people whom read it here on LJ. I'll post the first four parts of the description of the landscape, faith and so forth. I'm pretty bad at translating, so bare with me!

This part contains all the four parts I've posted on my livejournal at the moment.  I've also posted the original in Swedish in some of the posts for those who'd like to read that. I put the story behind a cut to shorten it on the front page. And also, it's posted in fictionwriters too if someone sees it over there.

Some lovely comments are welcome!
I'm anxious to hear what you have to say!

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