I'm so used to writing pieces without much dialogue, this was really a change. I was about ready to scrap all of it and start over again.
Thank you for such thourough critique. I didn't even realize that I was making them speak the way that I write. I did know it was a bit over the top rather than natural and simple.
Your questions to certain things made me realize that even though this will go on and explain them more, some of them (like Lex's intentions towards Ciaran) will be evdent in facial expressions and others, like how Lex ended up joining the pack and whether its a "family" matter or not, simply the three are a pack and are always present for anything that goes on. However, I now have a way to change this scene so that one will not be concerned over family vs. pack, because essentially pack is more important than family. Some are meant to be left unexplained initially, but others need explanation now.
Thank you again. And I really appreciated the reading rec's.
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Date: 2008-01-15 02:26 pm (UTC)I'm so used to writing pieces without much dialogue, this was really a change. I was about ready to scrap all of it and start over again.
Thank you for such thourough critique. I didn't even realize that I was making them speak the way that I write. I did know it was a bit over the top rather than natural and simple.
Your questions to certain things made me realize that even though this will go on and explain them more, some of them (like Lex's intentions towards Ciaran) will be evdent in facial expressions and others, like how Lex ended up joining the pack and whether its a "family" matter or not, simply the three are a pack and are always present for anything that goes on. However, I now have a way to change this scene so that one will not be concerned over family vs. pack, because essentially pack is more important than family. Some are meant to be left unexplained initially, but others need explanation now.
Thank you again. And I really appreciated the reading rec's.