Lost

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Lost…alone
abandoned by truth and reason
torn of all pride and dignity
haunted by
the shadow of the past
humbled by the joy of the future
Sadness
Accepting of reason
No turning back

Helpful critique? Yes, please.

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Any comments/critique on this poem would be greatly appreciated.  I'd love a different pair of eyes to look this over and offer some constructive criticism.

Leather Coin Purse 

I’m a leather coin purse
rubbed glossy with sweat
that rains from shaking fingers.
 
I have a silver clasp,
slightly tarnished but no less strong—
sewn into my skin and shadow,
gleaming with the secret between my cells
only the maker knew.
 
I am a leather coin purse,
an old, black pocket.
I’ve sat and dreamed in sock drawer bottoms,
beach sidewalks, on hotel beds
next to shaking, sweaty fingers
that stitched the sounds of crying into my seams.

I've looked for other movies like my idea, but....

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The simple plot info of my story is: 

Two people find out that they live on top of a lost city. The military and raiders are closing in as these two people enter the underground city, they get seperated, have to say alive and avoid the military and raiders.  Middle and then the end, detail don't really matter...

Here is my problem:

I know there is a 'lost world' genre, but my lost city is 98% lifeless. 

What movies/novel do you think of that would be great "research" for me

thanks

First post on here! Woot-woot. Just a bit about me, and what to expect..

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