The Pick Up Line Game #2

[aeriedraconia.livejournal.com]

We haven't played this game for a while.


The Pick Up line/Opening Line/First line Game

Post the first line of the main story or stories that you are working on.

Then, those of us reading them can reply with:
Does it or doesn't it make you want to read more?

And for the fun of it:
Guess the genre?
Guess what happens next?

Comments

[knittingknots.livejournal.com]

His mother used to tell him when he was a small boy that fairs were the most amazing, wondrous, messy things.

[starlight83.livejournal.com]

Sounds fun! Here's mine (plus the second because my first line is so tiny--sorry for my flagrant disregard for the rules!):

The owl was a bad omen. Nerie found it sitting perched in broad daylight on the naked limb of an old tree just outside the tavern door.

[starlight83.livejournal.com]

Want to read more: Yes. This is great.
Genre: Mainstream/slice of life
What happens next: He actually goes to a fair and is seriously disappointed.

[lenaf007.livejournal.com]

Very cool! Here are the first lines from two pieces I'm working on:

1) No matter what Suzie did, she couldn't convince herself this was a good idea.

2) A throbbing headache was nagging at his temples, and as he slowly traveled toward consciousness, he wondered whether or not he truly wanted to wake up.

[lenaf007.livejournal.com]

I love the word messy in this description.

[lenaf007.livejournal.com]

Want to read more: Yes, I want to find out why the owl was a bad omen.
Genre: I'm going to say fantasy, just because you use the word tavern instead of bar or pub.
What happens next: Something bad happens at the tavern.

Pick up line game

[jennyharker.livejournal.com]

"Sex is the subject of today's sermon," announced Father Miguel Inez.

Re: Pick up line game

[starlight83.livejournal.com]

Want to read more: Yes!
Genre: I have no idea. YA?
What happens next: Everybody is uncomfortable and, hopefully, a very amusing and enlightening sermon on sex!

[starlight83.livejournal.com]

Number 1

Want to read more: Sure
Genre: YA or maybe Romance
What happens next: Suzie goes through with it and it does turn out to be a terrible idea but the bad result drives the rest of the story.

Number 2

Want to read more: I'm on the fence with this one because waking up with a headache isn't quite gripping until you know why the character has one. So I'd read on to get more info and then decide.
Genre: No idea. Could be anything!
What happens next: Hungover, he manages to get up and fetch a cup of coffee.

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[jennyharker.livejournal.com]

The genre is mainstream fiction. What happens next is an amusing and unexpected scene played out from the view of a character who thinks out loud during Mass.

[secondlongest.livejournal.com]

The lonely stretch of highway led them to a small, empty town. A bent and rusty shopping cart lay on it's side in an empty parking lot.

[the-mome-wrath.livejournal.com]

Read more: Maybe, it would really depend on the next few sentences.
genre: disaster, horror or scifi dystopia
what's next: Scene and mood setting, then enter the main character

[the-mome-wrath.livejournal.com]

The only light was that from the anorexic waning moon, barely enough to line the edges of the dark foliage with the barest edge of silver. Just enough to keep from tripping.

[vflower.livejournal.com]

Laura died at age twenty and no one really knew why.

[vflower.livejournal.com]

Yes I would want to read more... Definitely has the potential to be fiction, fantasy, sci-fi, or magical realism.

[vflower.livejournal.com]

Yea I agree with what you said about the second line... It kind of makes me want to know but how interesting is a headache?

The first line definitely made me want to read on.

[vflower.livejournal.com]

Hmm... it's very descriptive and image driven but the line doesn't really tell me as the reader anything at all.

Genre: Fiction, mystery, or adventure

What happens: Not sure... the main character sneaks through something but what, we're not sure.

[canaryh.livejournal.com]

I want to know why Laura died, but since you mention her and not the narrator, it's Laura that I'm interested in, and she's already dead.

genre: doesn't exclude any genre

what happens: the narrator tells the reader why nobody knows the reason for Laura's death

[canaryh.livejournal.com]

Maybe, I screamed all the way down.

[starlight83.livejournal.com]

Want to read more: Yes
Genre: Horror/Supernatural
What happens next: Laura, as a ghost, decides to figure out what happened to her.

[mercury-hall.livejournal.com]

"Erica Dane does not know what a tree looks like."

[mercury-hall.livejournal.com]

Want to read more: A little bit.
Genre: That weird Young Adult genre that's kind of it's own little thing.
What happens next: He finds out his mother met her one true love at a fair, but they couldn't be together.

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[mercury-hall.livejournal.com]

Want to read more: For sure!
Genre: Slice of life? Or that weird Young Adult thing again. XD

[mercury-hall.livejournal.com]

Want to read more: Yes.
Genre: Sci-Fi?

[mercury-hall.livejournal.com]

Want to read more: SO MUCH!
Genre: Fantasy/Sci-Fi/Horror