Update to Remember Me.:)

[misskaywrites.livejournal.com]

I haven't been on in a few days, since I've been really busy. To anyone who has been keeping up with Remember Me go to my profile, and read the new update to it. It's now being posted in chapters by theeee way. & i hope you enjoy the new part!!! http://misskaywrites.livejournal.com/

Red Eyes:

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Hello! :D

I have a little story I wanted to post. And I thought I'd quite like to get some constructive critism on it. :) I've done a little header below... I wasn't sure whether it's needed but I thought I'd do it just in case. It's also posted on my journal so if someone would rather read it on there then just click on my name and it'll be the first entry. :)

Title: Red Eyes
Summary: When Tristan is taken from his home he's haunted by the message his father gave, and yearns to see whether his sister has survived the attack of his village. He is found by Lei and learns magic isn't nessisarily bad. Especially when you realise it's you're destiny.
Genre: Fantasy/Supernatural
Warnings: A very brief amount of...sexual content? And mild violence
Rating: PG

Thanks

Lucy

( Story here! )

Constructive Criticism Wanted and A Question

[trykynyx.livejournal.com]

Part of a story I am sort-of writing. Lily is a slave/child-soldier and so is Captain, technically, and they work for a company of soldiers in an uncharted world-type thing. Captain is 16 and basically a soldier in training, he does a lot of their dirty work when it comes to other slaves. Lily is 12-ish and has unfortunately caught the attention of Captain, who likes to pay her visits at night. Lily tried the "keep-your-head-down-and-don't-bathe" approach, but, after fighting on the battlefield against escaped slaves, decided she would at least try to fight back. These are examples of that interaction. Oh yeah, so this stuff is rated Teen-ish because of unpleasantness. Just in case that could be an issue..


( At first, Captain was angry... )

( They both went in broken and they came out broken-er. )

Also, do you write chronologically in your story, or jump around? I can't seem to write "in a straight line," but that leaves me with a bunch of scenes and a really shaky timeline. Do you usually have the whole story planned out when you start, or just run with it?