Revised edition of chapter 1
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I completely changed the beginning of it (I didn't like how it begun anyway) and (hopefully) removed or changed all the repetitive stuff, as per
teadoll's suggestions. Hopefully it's better this time around. EDIT: Chapter 2 is here: http://community.livejournal.com/writers_loft/61148.html
( Chapter 1, revised )
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Oh, BTW, if you want to know what Emyll, at least, looks like, imagine the black-haired chick who has the accent from the new Indiana Jones movie (I haven't seen it but she's in the trailer), except three and a half feet tall and with blue skin and wings, and that's EXACTLY what Emyll looks like.
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( Chapter 1, revised )
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Oh, BTW, if you want to know what Emyll, at least, looks like, imagine the black-haired chick who has the accent from the new Indiana Jones movie (I haven't seen it but she's in the trailer), except three and a half feet tall and with blue skin and wings, and that's EXACTLY what Emyll looks like.